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R59 — the rhyme clause alone, with the line held fixed

v0.1, pilot. R57 released the metre and kept the rhyme, so that the rhyme was the only clause that could fail. R59 goes one step further and releases the rhyme itself, holding everything else — including the line — fixed, so that a paired rendering differs in exactly one thing: whether the English line-ends must chime.

The regime exists because RS-20260830b-rhyme-family §3 found that a published monorhymer's rhyme words almost never carry the senses his author put at the rhyme (pooled R = 0.0384, 19 of 28 odes at zero) while the same senses are found eight times as often somewhere in the last words of the same lines. That is a claim about where a sense goes when the line-end is spoken for, and it cannot be tested on rhymed renderings alone: it needs the same hand, the same poem and the same senses with the rhyme switched off.

The rule

1. R51 §1 carries over unchanged and outranks everything below: render the sense, adding no fact, referent or evaluation and dropping none; enumerate the options before choosing and write the enumeration down; grade mechanically after the hand has written its own reading; never revise a rendering to move a grade; verse stays verse; freeze the log before any evaluation is designed and before any published hand's page is opened.
2. L-LINE, binding on both arms. One English line per Persian hemistich, in the source's order, nothing merged, nothing split, nothing moved between lines. This is what makes the two arms comparable line for line, and it is what R57 did not require.
3. No metre clause. Line length is free in both arms. Metre is the variable R57 and ARM-leaf-contract already own; here it is released so that it cannot differ between arms.
4. The two arms differ in exactly one clause. - MONO — the Persian monorhyme is carried at every rhyming position of the ghazal: both hemistichs of bayt 1 and the second hemistich of every later bayt. One English rhyme family throughout; no rhyme word is used twice, as Persian practice requires of the qāfiya. - PLAIN — no rhyme is sought or avoided at any position. The line ends where the sense ends.
5. The rhyme family is chosen once, before the first line is written, from a written enumeration of the candidate families and what each was expected to hold. The enumeration is part of the log. It is chosen on ordinary craft grounds — which family lets the poem be rendered best — and not by counting how many rhyme-position senses it would place at the rhyme. Choosing a family in order to move that count is the failure this clause exists to prevent.
6. MONO is written first, PLAIN second, and PLAIN may not be revised toward MONO. The order is fixed so that the unconstrained arm is not a memory of the constrained one's solutions.
7. The instrument is the enumeration, not a score. For every hemistich the log records, before any comparison: the literal sense of the Persian line-final word, what the arm put where, what it had to drop or move, and what the live alternatives were. No number in either log is a quality claim; the lead never judges its own translation.

What R59 is not

It is not a claim that unrhymed English is better, and no comparison of the two arms on quality is made anywhere. It is an attempt to measure what the rhyme clause does to the position of a sense in one hand's English, where the hand, the poem, the senses and the line are all held fixed.

Known limitation, declared at constitution

The lead conceived the study limb's outcome variable — the distance of a sense-bearing word from its line's end — before writing either arm. A hand that knows the measure can move it. The R59 pair is therefore descriptive in any design that uses it, exactly as RS-20260830b-rhyme-family §5 was; the confirmatory weight sits on published hands who cannot have known the measure.