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R54 — the forced pair: one poem, two whole renderings, one half of the device each

v0.1, pilot. R44's craft clauses, plus the choice a translator actually faces at a radif English cannot host whole.

R51 (S224) asked whether the Persian rhyming position […qāfiya][radif] can be carried into English entire, and answered: only where the radif is something an English clause can end on and the word before it can still be rhymed. Where it cannot, the hand is not left with nothing. It is left with a choice between the two halves — keep the repeated tail and give up the chime, or keep the chime and give up the repeated tail — and R51 had no way to put the two choices side by side, because its RH/RD variants were line-end substitutions inside one text and were declared instrument material, never translations of record (R51 rule 5).

R54 makes both choices as translations of record. Two complete renderings of the same poem, by the same hand, at the same sitting, each defensible on its own as what a translator might publish.

The rule

1. These clauses of R44 carry over unchanged and outrank everything added here: - Render the sense. No fact, event, referent or evaluation added; nothing dropped. A rhyme bought with a word the Persian has not got is a refusal, not a rhyme. - Enumerate before choosing, and write the enumeration down, whether or not it yields. - Grade every rhyming position mechanically with tools/rhyme_pairs.py after the hand has written its own reading down, both standing where they differ. - The hand does not revise a rendering to move a grade. - Verse stays verse. - Freeze the log before any evaluation is designed and before any published hand is opened.
2. Eligibility. R54 applies only where the poem's radif has been shown, by written enumeration before any line is rendered, to be unhostable together with its chime in English. Where both halves can be carried, R51 applies and there is no forced pair.
3. The REP rendering — the repeated tail kept. At every rhyming position the English line ends in the same word or phrase, identical at every position. The hand does not choose the word before it for sound. Where two renderings of a position are equally defensible on rule 1 and one of them would chime with another position, the non-chiming one is taken, and the fact is logged. Any chime that survives is recorded, not removed by force.
4. The CHI rendering — the chime kept. At every rhyming position the English line ends in a word that rhymes with the corresponding word at every other position, to the source's own depth. No two positions end in the same word, and the radif's sense is carried inside the line rather than as an identical tail. Where a position cannot be rhymed without breaking rule 1, it is graded REFUSED and printed as it stands.
5. Both renderings are translations of record, filed as type: translation, each with its own log. Neither is a variant of the other: they are written from the Persian, and the second is not made by editing the first. The order in which the two were written is recorded per poem, and the order alternates across the poems of one sitting so that no policy is always second.
6. Neither rendering is offered as the better policy. R54 produces the pair; it does not rank it. Any ranking comes from an evaluation designed after the pair is frozen, and the hand that writes the pair never judges it (charter §5).
7. Everything in rules 3–5 is written before the experiment that uses it exists, and the log is frozen and committed before the design is written.

The known limitation, declared here rather than discovered later

One hand writes both renderings, and that hand knows a comparison is coming. R51 had a partial protection — the arms differed only at the line-end, so a hand that wrote worse English whenever it removed something showed up symmetrically. R54 does not have that protection: the two renderings differ throughout, because the two rhyme constraints reach back into the whole line. Two things stand in its place, and neither is sufficient alone:

• rule 5's alternation of writing order, so that fatigue and second-draft advantage do not always fall on the same policy; and
• the design that uses the pair must hold the pair fixed and vary only what the reader is told, so that whatever the hand did unequally is constant across the conditions being compared and cancels in the contrast. A design that simply asks which of the two is better is measuring the hand, not the policy.

That second point is a constraint on the experiment, not on this regime, and it is stated here because it is the reason this regime is safe to use at all.

What R54 is not

It is not a recommendation that a ghazal be Englished either way, and the pair is not a pair of candidate house styles. It exists because the choice is real, forced, and — until now — unmade on the page anywhere in this project's shelf: the project has one accidental REP (ghazal ۱۶ under R51, where Persian grammar made the choice for the hand) and no CHI at all.