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Repository path: workshop/translations/monelle-paroles/device-census.md · rendered 2026-09-09

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linksworkshop/translations/monelle-paroles/source-fr-segments.txt, workshop/translations/monelle-paroles/R06-v1/translation.md, workshop/translations/monelle-paroles/R04-v1/translation.md, workshop/experiments/E-20260807f-carriage-or-strangeness/design.md

«Paroles de Monelle» — the source's marked formal features, by segment

Made from the French alone, at translation time, before any arm was built. Copied verbatim from R06-v1's translator's log. This is the object the FORM factor of E-20260807f manipulates: the CARRIED arms give every device below a functional English equivalent; the FLATTENED arms remove every device below while holding every proposition.

It is not the lead's word against nobody's. Control G5 puts the French segments to a seat that sees no English at all and asks it to name each segment's marked formal features; the registered bar is that the independent list covers ≥ 60% of the device families named here, computed per segment and pooled.

Three devices per segment are named as the scored set (18 in all). Others exist and are listed under also present; the 18 are the ones the operators are defined on.

seg # device where
S1 1 anaphora on the imperative Détruis — 6 occurrences, 4 sentences, including the opening tricolon Détruis, détruis, détruis throughout
S1 2 exact phrase repetition where French could reduce — les anciennes habitations d'hommes et les anciennes habitations d'âmes ¶3
S1 3 polyptoton Détruis … destruction closing the litany on its own root ¶4
S2 4 a fixed two-clause template used twice — Et pour X, il faut Y. Et ainsi Z paraît/semble W. ¶1, ¶2
S2 5 paragraph-initial coordinators in sequence — Et / Et / Car / Mais all four ¶
S2 6 antithetical pairs on one root — bonté supérieure / bonté inférieure; art ancien / art nouveau ¶1, ¶2
S3 7 paragraph-initial connective chain — Et / Et / Car / Voilà pourquoi ¶3–¶6
S3 8 keyword chain — anciennes peaux (de serpent) 4×, jeunes serpents 3×, unreduced ¶3–¶6
S3 9 gapping in the simile — ainsi que les serpents leurs anciennes peaux, verb elided ¶3
S4 10 imperative series — 7 imperatives in 6 short verse-paragraphs, no connective tissue throughout
S4 11 doubled toi-même chiasmus — Bâtis ta maison toi-même et brûle-la toi-même ¶2
S4 12 register mixture in the negation — Ne jette pas beside Ne construis point ¶3, ¶4
S5 13 jussive anaphora — Que + subjunctive, 4 consecutive versets ¶5–¶8
S5 14 semicolon verset chain — the whole segment is one chain of semicolon-linked versets, not sentences throughout
S5 15 polyptoton and grammatical rhyme — création périsse, sitôt créée against tout dieu s'envole, sitôt créé; tout dieu … dieu du moment ¶5–¶8
S6 16 the fixed epigram template, 6× — [imperative] + le moment. Tout(e) [abstract noun] qui dure est [antonym]. ¶4–¶9
S6 17 figura etymologica inside each of the 6 — Pense/pensée, Aime/amour, sincère/sincérité, juste/justice, Agis/action, heureux/bonheur ¶4–¶9
S6 18 the refrain word moment — 11 occurrences, and the closing colon-chained tricolon Vois: … berceau et un cercueil: que … throughout

Also present, not in the scored 18: the bare-abstract-noun predicates of S6 (five bare, one articled — un règne défunt — the source breaking its own pattern); the alliteration of berceau et cercueil; ne … point recurring in S5 and S6; the destruction/formation pairing across the four section-heads and its echo in saisons destructrices et formatrices (S4); sous l'aspect du moment as a calque of sub specie.

What is deliberately NOT a device here. Nothing on this list is a fact of content. Every one of the eighteen can be removed without changing what any sentence asserts, which is the property the experiment's accuracy-parity gate G1 exists to check.