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idT-max-havelaar-i-b-R18-v1
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T-max-havelaar-i-b-R18-v1 — Multatuli, Max Havelaar ch. I ¶7–9, under R18 specification A

Translation

And it is not only verses that lure the young into untruth. Go into the theatre one evening, and listen there to the sort of lies that are put upon a man. The hero of the piece is fished out of the water by somebody who is on the point of going bankrupt. Then he gives him half his fortune. That cannot be true. When my hat blew into the water on the Prinsengracht the other day — Frits says: was blown — I gave the man who brought it back to me a ten-cent piece; and he was satisfied. I know very well that I ought to have given something more if he had pulled me out myself, but certainly not half my fortune. For it is plain enough that at that rate a man need only fall into the water twice to be a pauper. The worst of such performances on the stage is that the public grows so used to all this untruth that it finds it fine, and applauds. I have sometimes had a mind to throw a whole pit into the water, to see which of them had meant that applause. I, who am fond of truth, give everybody warning that I will not pay so high a salvage for the fishing-up of my person. Anyone who is not content with less may let me lie. On Sundays only I would give something more, because then I wear my gold watch-chain, and another coat.

Yes, the stage ruins a great many, more even than the novels do. It is all so visible! With a little tinsel and a little lace of punched paper the whole thing looks so inviting. For children, I mean, and for people who are not in business. Even when those theatre people set out to represent poverty, their representation is always a lie. A girl whose father has gone bankrupt works to keep the family. Very good. So there she sits, sewing, or knitting, or embroidering. But now count the stitches she makes in the course of the whole act. She talks, she sighs, she walks to the window, but work she does not. The family that can live on this labour needs very little. Such a girl is of course the heroine. She has thrown several seducers down the stairs, she keeps crying out: "oh my mother, oh, my mother!" and so represents Virtue. What sort of virtue is that, which needs a whole year for a pair of woollen stockings? Does all this not give false notions of virtue, and of "working for one's bread"? All nonsense and lies!

Then her first lover — who used to be a clerk at the copy-book, but is now enormously rich — comes back all at once, and marries her. Lies again. A man who has money does not marry a girl out of a bankrupt house. And if you think that on the stage this can pass as an exception, my objection still stands: that the sense of truth is spoiled among the people, who take the exception for the rule, and that public morality is undermined by accustoming them to applaud on the stage what every respectable broker or merchant holds to be a ridiculous madness in the world. When I married, we were thirteen of us at my father-in-law's office — Last & Co — and there was some business doing!

Translator's log

Decisions and alternatives, not quality claims. spec records the clause of specification A that the decision acted on, or — where the specification was silent and the choice was the translator's own. Every decision in this table is also a decision in the pair's other member, and the paired log records what changed there; the two logs are meant to be read against each other.

# site Dutch live options chosen spec note
1 ¶7 «aan den man worden gebracht» are palmed off / are sold / are put upon a man / are disposed of over the counter are put upon a man — The idiom is commercial (to bring to the man = to get sold). English "put upon" keeps the selling and the imposition at once. R18-v2 takes the counter reading of the same idiom.
2 ¶7 «myn hoed te-water woei — Frits zegt: waaide» keep the Dutch forms / find an English strong-weak doublet / substitute a different usage shibboleth / drop the interruption blew … Frits says: was blown A: he breaks off to correct a word A declared loss. The joke is a strong/weak past-tense doublet — Droogstoppel writes the older strong woei, his son corrects him to the regular weak waaide — and English has no such doublet on blow. What is kept is the shape: an interruption, a son correcting his father's usage in one italicised word. What is lost is that the correction is about morphology: the English correction is about voice. Nothing available preserved both.
3 ¶7 «een dubbeltje» a dubbeltje / tenpence / a dime / a ten-cent piece / twopence a ten-cent piece A: the sum is exact to the penny British English is declared, so dime is out and tenpence would convert the currency. Ten-cent piece keeps the exactness, which is the characterising thing about the sum. The Dutch coin's name is lost.
4 ¶7 «bergloon» reward / salvage / finder's fee salvage — The one place where English holds the source's exact register. Bergloon is the legal term for salvage money, and Droogstoppel is applying maritime salvage law to the recovery of his own body. English salvage is the same term in the same law. Nothing was lost here and the log records it because a log that only records losses is a distorted instrument.
5 ¶7 «Wie met minder niet tevreden is, mag me laten liggen» may leave me where I am / may let me lie / is welcome to leave me in the water may let me lie A: no more to say The Dutch is four words past the point; the English is kept as flat.
6 ¶7 «myn kantilje ketting» my cantille chain / my filigree chain / my bullion chain / my gold watch-chain / my good chain my gold watch-chain — A declared loss. Kantilje is purl — coiled fine wire — and names the material of a specific kind of Sunday chain. Every faithful English word for it (purl, bullion, cantille) is either a needlework term or unknown. Gold watch-chain keeps the class signal and drops the material.
7 ¶8 «Het is zoo aanschouwelyk!» It is so vivid! / It is all so visible! / You can see it all! It is all so visible! A: one test of whether something is true, which is whether it happened to him Aanschouwelyk is available to the eye, and his objection to the theatre is exactly that seeing beats knowing. Vivid would have made him a critic.
8 ¶8 «kant van uitgeslagen papier» paper lace / lace of punched paper / cut-paper lace lace of punched paper — Uitgeslagen is struck out with a die. The stage's lace is stamped, i.e. manufactured, i.e. a lie about lace. Kept literal.
9 ¶8 «stelt dus de deugd voor» stands for Virtue / represents Virtue / is Virtue so represents Virtue — Capitalised: the abstraction is the point, and it is what he is about to price.
10 ¶8 «"werken voor den kost"» earning a living / working for one's bread / working for one's keep working for one's bread — Italics are Multatuli's and are kept. The phrase is in quotation marks in the source because Droogstoppel is quoting the stage's cant back at it.
11 ¶9 «uit een gefailleerd huis» from a ruined family / out of a bankrupt house out of a bankrupt house A: one test of whether something is good, which is whether it pays Huis is family and firm at once, and English house carries both. The joke — that a family is a business that can fail — survives intact.
12 ¶9 «en er ging wat om!» and a great deal of money passed through it! / and there was some business doing! / and there was plenty going on! and there was some business doing! A: the man whose agreement he takes for granted Er gaat wat om is turnover. He measures his marriage by the size of the counting-house, and the sentence has to end on the boast without knowing it is one.
13 whole sentence architecture — mean 16.8 words over 34 sentences A: he says a thing, and then the next thing, and stops when there is no more to say Recorded here because it is a decision and not an accident, and because the pair's other member records 22.3 over 28. E-20260805d amendment A4 exists to price exactly this.
14 whole the exclamations All nonsense and lies! / Nonsense and lies, the whole of it. All nonsense and lies! A: his indignation is real indignation Both members assert the same thing; only this one shouts.

Two things this log is not. It is not a claim that specification A is Multatuli's Droogstoppel — that is what E-20260805d puts to seats who have read the Dutch and no English. And it contains no quality judgment about either member of the pair; the lead does not judge its own translation (charter §5).

A regime defect found by using the regime, recorded here rather than quietly fixed

R18 P4 and R18 P5 are in conflict, and P5 wins. P4 says the second rendering is written from the source and that the first is not consulted while it is drafted. P5 requires that every proposition asserted in one be asserted in the other. The second cannot be done without the first in view. What actually happened: R18-v1 was written straight through from the Dutch; R18-v2 was then written from the Dutch with R18-v1's propositional inventory beside it, which is what parity requires and what P4 as drafted forbids. P4 is amended on the regime page to say so. The consequence for the experiment is real and is declared there: the second member is not an independent second translation, and the pair is not evidence about anything an independent second translation would show.

Contamination

contamination: suspected. Basis and measurement in ../R18-v2/translation.md §Contamination, which measures both members of the pair against the same comparator in one gate.