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T-kronenwaechter-sturm-R08-v1 — Arnim, «Die Kronenwächter», the storm scene, resistancy

Source. As ../R06-v1/translation.md: Arnim, «Die Kronenwächter» I.7 «Der Sturm» (1817), 694 German words in eight segments, the collated copy-text at ../source-de-segments.txt.

Regime. R08 v1.0 — resistancy, the ten-rule set frozen 2026-07-28 (S048), consulted at every choice, with a coverage code on every logged decision and INT on decisions made by interpretation rather than by rule. Cost $0.

Order. Rendered second, after R06 and before R07, matching E-20260808c exactly.

Contamination. none, on the same basis as R06-v1 — no English translation of «Die Kronenwächter» is reachable, so tools/dependence_check.py has no comparator and is not run; the absence is declared rather than left silent. Within-run: this arm was written with the frozen R06 in view, which is the standing lead-ladder limitation and is measured after the fact by the arm-to-arm overlap reported in the result page, not asserted here.

The translation

S1

While he yet so well-pleased spoke, the Prior entered and warned him anxiously, the Bürgermeister was letting the house be ringed round on all sides by armed burghers. The stranger woman thought it were on account of the daughter, but the Baumeister shook with his head and the Prior said, he had heard him speak very heatedly of a woman who gave herself out for the heiress-daughter of a reigning house, but was pursued by the kindred of that house as an impostress.

S2

"I know what they want," sighed the stranger woman, "the noble stones out of the father's inheritance, give it them, I possess diamonds of purer water in the tears of joy that I weep. Let them in, the envious souls, they shall feel that they can take nothing from me, so long as I hold the beloved son in my arms, he is mine and no force parts me from him."

S3

The Baumeister stepped between and sought to convince her, the possession of those costlinesses could be only a pretext, the son was not granted her by the unrelenting ones, so as to avenge in her yet the transgression of the unhappy spouse. "Ye know him now well kept, richly provided for," said he, "ye part not for ever from him, your vow is loosed, fulfil the wishes of my fidelity, requite my many years' service! What is to you the princely name, of which many hold you forfeit on account of the unequal birth of your mother and on account of the espousal with the unknown knight. As my wife the free city of Straßburg can protect you."

S4

— But the stranger woman lifted up the skull of the beloved spouse and spoke: "All could I make you a gift of, and requited your services but slightly, and the one thing that ye demand, my heart, my hand, they both are not mine; from my spouse, from my son no resolve parts me, only the force that tears me from life can sever me from them. Leave me over to the destiny of my heaven."

S5

In this moment the wrathful Bürgermeister thrust the stranger woman's people, who wanted to hold him up, impatiently from him and stepped in, with the outcry "In the name of my Count!" But the Baumeister led towards him, in the moment where he wanted to declare the stranger woman a prisoner, the trembling Apollonia. This unexplainable appearance brought the vehement man out of composure; had he caught sight of Berthold, so had his wrath found an explanation, but the stranger woman held him yet in her arms. "Thou here?" asked the Bürgermeister stammering and Apollonia could, sobbing, not answer. After short reflection he took her by the arm, Berthold wanted to hold her back, but she herself withdrew from him in the fear the hand that he had seized of the turned-away one.

S6

An indeterminateness had seized them all, which lamed each one, and as sicknesses in the human being send such forefeelings of exhaustion on before, so this time a violent occurrence in the airs seemed to work upon all the inhabitants like a general sickness of the star. A storm quaked through the lanes of the town, which those inwardly shaken had until now failed to hear. With mounting vehemence throbbed the air-veins; the falling rows of the roof-stones, the rattling windows, the outcry of the people who no longer believed themselves safe in their tottering wooden buildings became audible only now, where the storm-wind struck open a badly closed window of the room where all still found themselves, led straw and tree-branches in and drove on its mad game with everything movable in the room.

S7

From all sides voices called after the Bürgermeister, the command was demanded of him that all fires on the hearths be quenched, so that not a general conflagration should fill the terror. The man was little accustomed to such swift resolutions, he demanded in his embarrassment after the Rathaus, but the daughter he did not let out of his hand, even as the stranger woman pressed the skull and the son at all the storm ever more firmly to herself. So now the Bürgermeister drew off with the daughter, the grim slaughterer with the shattered lamb, over which the safe stall had broken down.

S8

Now stepped, when he had departed, the Prior out of his hiding-place; he had prayed for his name, for his office, that he might not be taken in claim as abductor of the daughter. He used for flight the first moments, who would have believed that a fiery red countenance could become so pale!

Translator's log — frozen before any evaluation of this translation was designed

Coverage code on each: D a rule names the feature and only one live option satisfies it · P rules bear and two or more live options satisfy them · S no rule bears. INT marks a decision made by interpreting what the source means rather than by any rule (R08 §5a).

1. S1 «Während er noch so wohlgefällig sprach» → While he yet so well-pleased spoke. D (R2) — the German holds the verb to the end and R2 makes clause order binding as far as English grammar allows. English grammar does allow it here; it is merely bad. well-pleased for «wohlgefällig» is D (R6), a calque against the domestic complacently R06 took.

2. S1 «warnte ihn ängstlich, der Bürgermeister lasse…» → warned him anxiously, the Bürgermeister was letting…. D (R5) — the German supplies no daß, so no that is supplied. The result is a comma splice in English, which R1 licenses and F7 would forbid. The Konjunktiv I is unrecoverable (there is no English mood for it); the comma splice is what is left to carry the fact that this is still the Prior's report. INT on that judgment.

3. S1 «Bürgermeister», «Baumeister», «Bürger» → D (R7) for the first two, retained unassimilated and unglossed. For «Bürger» I took burghers rather than retaining Bürger: P (R7, R9) — the English word is itself the unassimilated German one naturalised, and three retained German nouns in one sentence crosses R9's limit toward the parodic.

4. S1 «die Fremde» → the stranger woman throughout, against R06's the stranger. D (R7/R8) — German marks her gender in the article and English does not; the phrase is marked English, which is the point, and it also keeps her un-named as the German keeps her un-named.

5. S1 «schüttelte mit dem Kopfe» → shook with his head. D (R6) — the German governs a preposition English does not, and the calque keeps it.

6. S1 «Erbtochter» → heiress-daughter; «Betrügerin» → impostress. D (R6) for the compound, D (R3) for the feminine agent noun, which English has and has let go dead.

7. S2 «gebt es ihnen» → give it them. D (R4) — the antecedent of es is open between the stones and the inheritance, and it keeps both readings open where let them have them would close one. The double-object give it them is also P (R2).

8. S2 «die edlen Steine» → the noble stones. D (R6) — precious stones is the domestic equivalent and noble is the word.

9. S2 «aus dem Erbe des Vaters», «den geliebten Sohn» → out of the father's inheritance, the beloved son. D (R5) — the German has definite articles and no possessives; nothing is supplied. This is the single most frequent operation in this arm and it is invisible one site at a time.

10. S2, the commas. The German runs five independent clauses together on commas. D (R1) — they stand.

11. S3 «trat zwischen» → stepped between, bare. D (R5), and the place where R06 supplied them.

12. S3 «Ihr / Euer / Euch» → ye / your / you. D (R7) — a form of address, retained rather than assimilated to modern you; D (R3) licenses the dead English form. This is the one place in the passage where English owns an exponent for a source device, and it owns it only because the form is obsolete. The mirror case is fork 18 below.

13. S3 «Kostbarkeiten» → costlinesses. D (R6). «Vermählung» → espousal, D (R3).

14. S3 «…für verlustig achten.» → full stop kept, no question mark. D (R1) — the source prints an interrogative form with a terminal point and R1 forbids repairing it. R06 repaired it and logged the repair.

15. S3 «Straßburg» → Straßburg, eszett and all. D (R7), against R06's Strasbourg.

16. S4 «und lohnte Eure Dienste nur gering» → and requited your services but slightly. D (R5) — no would still supplied, so the English clause is ambiguous between past indicative and past subjunctive exactly as the bare German verb form is; D (R4) on the same site. R06 supplied would still and logged the supplied word.

17. S4 «Überlaßt mich dem Geschicke» → Leave me over to the destiny. D (R6) — the separable prefix calqued.

18. S5 «Du hier?» → Thou here?. D (R7) — the Bürgermeister drops to du with his daughter in the middle of a scene where everyone else is on Ihr, and English has exactly one dead form that marks it. Taking thou costs the line its modernity and is the only way the contrast with ye in S3/S4 survives at all. INT.

19. S5 «hätte er … so hätte» → had he … so had. D (R2), P (R3) — the German conditional without wenn, kept, with the resumptive so English drops.

20. S5 «Apollonia konnte schluchzend nicht antworten» → Apollonia could, sobbing, not answer. D (R2) — the participle sits inside the verb bracket and stays there.

21. S5 «von der Abgewendeten» → of the turned-away one. D (R6) — a substantivised participle English does not form, formed.

22. S6 «überhört hatten» → had until now failed to hear, not had overheard. S — no rule bears. R6 licenses calquing a figure; «überhören» is a lexical item meaning to fail to hear, and the English cognate means the opposite. Rendering it overheard would be a mistranslation wearing R6 as a costume, and R6 does not reach it. Recorded because it is the clearest case in this arm of a rule that could have been mis-applied to produce an error.

23. S6 «Unbestimmtheit», «lähmte», «in den Lüften», «des Gestirns» → indeterminateness, lamed, in the airs, of the star. D (R6) on the first two, D (R5) on the plural airs and the singular collective star, both kept as the German has them.

24. S6 «Mit steigender Heftigkeit pochten die Luftadern» → With mounting vehemence throbbed the air-veins. D (R2) on the inversion, D (R6) on air-veins — the same image R06 also kept, by different means and with the English word order repaired.

25. S6 «klirrenden» → rattling, not an invented clirring. P (R6, R9) — R9 vetoes the coinage and R6 does not require it, since the German word is ordinary.

26. S6, the 78-word period. Kept whole, one sentence. D (R2).

27. S7 «Feuersbrunst» → conflagration. P (R6, R9) — no English calque of the compound exists that is not a coinage, and both live options satisfy the rules; this is a site where the rules bear and do not choose.

28. S7 «nach dem Rathause» → after the Rathaus. D (R7) on the institution, D (R6) on the governed preposition.

29. S7 «Schlächter», «Stall» → slaughterer, stall. D (R6) both — R06 took butcher and fold, which are the domestic equivalents and which make the metaphor work in English. The rules forbid making it work.

30. S8 «Nun trat … der Prior … heraus» → Now stepped … the Prior … out. D (R2).

31. S8 «in Anspruch genommen werden möchte» → be taken in claim. D (R6).

32. S8, the comma splice before who would have believed. D (R1) — R06 took a dash.

R10 was not invoked anywhere. Nothing in this passage was rendered by exceeding the source, so the upper-bound caveat R08 §Known limitations attaches to the D-rate does not apply to this arm.

Counts over 32 logged decisions: D 26 · P 5 · S 1 · INT 3.