Repository path: workshop/translations/karen/opportunity.md · rendered 2026-09-09
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| type | manifest |
|---|---|
| id | karen-r10-opportunity |
| status | frozen |
| created | 2026-07-31 |
| updated | 2026-07-31 |
| senses | naturalness |
| internal-judgment-only | true |
| links | workshop/regimes/R10-anchored-register.md, workshop/translations/karen/source-unit.txt, workshop/experiments/E-20260731f-catalogue-reach/claims.json |
R10 §6 opportunity list — Kielland «Karen» ¶1–15, against the two target catalogues
What this is. R10 §6 requires the translator to record, before translating, which of the target catalogue's numbered propositions the source unit gives any occasion for at all — so that a proposition found absent from a rendering for want of material is not confused with one the translator failed to install.
Deviation, recorded rather than smoothed. This list was written after both drafts were composed and before either was committed, any evaluation was designed, or any rater saw anything. It is therefore not frozen ahead of the translation in the sense §6 requires, and the first execution of R10 deviates from its own regime on that clause. The bias runs toward the design's own hypothesis: a translator who has already drafted could mark opportunity: yes only where it succeeded, inflating the positive control. The mitigation is that every judgment below is stated as a fact about the SOURCE, with the source material named, so it can be checked against source-unit.txt rather than against either rendering. A reader who disagrees can recompute the statistic on their own opportunity set; the raw cells are stored.
Claim ids and wordings are claims.json at ca602a7, frozen before the source was read for translation.
Target C — A-mchugh-presence (unmarked / literary-contemporary)
| id | opportunity | the source material that decides it |
|---|---|---|
| C01 no archaism | yes | the opening formula Der var engang, and 1882 orthography throughout, both invite archaic English |
| C02 no period lexis | yes | Kro, Kaffepunch, Vadmelskroppe, Postvogn, Reisestald, Torvskur are all period-bound objects |
| C03 no era-marking slang / orthographic play | yes | ¶10's fandens Jav is the one place slang could be reached for |
| C04 no dialect spelling | yes | Anders Postkarl's grumble (¶10) is the one line of rustic speech |
| C05 no learned or Latinate display | yes | Meriter, Overslag, selvbehagelig, uvanlig Fart all admit a Latinate English rendering |
| C06 unobtrusive free indirect discourse | yes | ¶6 (Det var bare noget underligt over henne) and ¶15 (the fox's reasoning) are FID in the source |
| C07 third person, one consciousness, without exception | NO — the source refuses it | the narration leaves Karen for the wind (¶7–9), the postboy (¶10–11), the fox and the hare (¶14–15). The proposition cannot be satisfied by any translation of this unit |
| C08 dialogue attributed with say | yes | one attributed line, ¶10, whose verb is knurrede (growled) |
| C09 four figures in 1,511 words | NO — untestable off its own passage | the proposition names a count over a specific 1,511-word passage; neither rendering is that passage |
| C10 figures brief, none extended | yes | the wind's animation (¶7–9) is the one place a conceit could be built |
| C11 named particulars carry the texture | yes | Krarup Kro, Vesterhavet, Marehalm, Lyng, Torvmyr, en halv Mil |
| C12 particulars not glossed | yes | Marehalm, Vadmel, Kaffepunch and the Danish Mil each invite an explanatory gloss |
| C13 very short and one-sentence paragraphs used structurally | yes | ¶1 and ¶3 and ¶14 are one or two sentences in the source |
| C14 forty-eight paragraphs in 1,511 words | NO — untestable off its own passage | as C09 |
| C15 obscenity flat and unattributed | partial — counted yes |
¶10 supplies the oath; it does not supply an unattributed one, since the source attributes it. A rendering can be flat but not unattributed |
| C16 contractions in exposition as well as speech | yes | the whole narration |
| C17 sentence length varies widely, unpatterned | yes | ¶8 is 163 source words against ¶1's 11 |
| C18 narratorial presence perceptible, no idiolect | yes | the fairytale frame gives the narrator a presence to hold or lose |
| C19 no sound play, orthographic play, typographic device | yes | ¶8's stable racket is where sound play would be reached for |
Opportunity set for target C: 16 of 19. Excluded: C07 (the source refuses it), C09 and C14 (counts over the anchor's own passage).
Target P — A-mansfield-garden-party (period-idiomatic)
| id | opportunity | the source material that decides it |
|---|---|---|
| M01 free indirect discourse without a reporting clause | yes | ¶6, ¶15, as C06 |
| M02 unattributed exclamations inside third person | yes | ¶6's dashes and ¶15's self-satisfied reasoning both admit them |
| M03 self-correction in the character's voice | yes | ¶6's serial approximation — eller lyttede — eller ventede — eller drømte |
| M04 contracted verb forms in narration | yes | the whole narration |
| M05 colloquial spoken idiom | yes | ¶10 |
| M06 immediate lexical repetition for emphasis | yes | langt — langt forbi (¶5); dummere og dummere (¶15) |
| M07 written-out sound play or onomatopoeia | NO — the source supplies none | ¶8 names the noises (Skraal, skreg, snadre, Allarm) and spells none of them. Installing one would be an addition, not a rendering |
| M08 named objects date the prose before the present | yes | as C02, from the other side |
| M09 long dash-driven sentences against short declaratives | yes | ¶8 (163 words) against ¶1 (11) and ¶14 (17) |
| M10 one characterised voice sustained without drift | yes | as C18 |
| M11 structural irony sprung by an overheard cruelty at the close | NO — the unit has no close | ¶1–15 are the story's opening; the overheard cruelty is at ¶37–41, outside the unit |
Opportunity set for target P: 9 of 11. Excluded: M07 (no material) and M11 (the unit is not a whole story).
What the two exclusion classes are, because they are not the same thing
- No material in this source — C07, M07, M11. A different source unit would supply it. This is a fact about the pairing.
- Untestable off the anchor's own passage — C09, C14. No source would supply it, because the proposition is a count over 1,511 specific words. These two propositions are in the anchor's catalogue and cannot be carried anywhere by anyone, which is a property of the catalogue rather than of the translation.