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T-kammacher-R04-v1 — Gottfried Keller, «Die drei gerechten Kammacher» (1856), German → English

The translation limb of ARM-framework-v01 step 2. One span, translated close from the source alone under R04, written and frozen before the Class A census was built and before any published English of this span was opened. That ordering is the artifact's whole evidential value: the filed rendering is what an ordinary close translation of this scene looks like when the translator is not yet reaching for anything.

Source

Gottfried Keller (1819–1890), «Die drei gerechten Kammacher», from Die Leute von Seldwyla, Erster Band (1856; the tale added in the 1856 volume). Text from Project Gutenberg ebook 6696, fetched 2026-08-03 by direct HTTPS GET of https://www.gutenberg.org/cache/epub/6696/pg6696.txt. Public domain (Keller d. 1890).

The tale runs 39 paragraphs in this transcription. The span translated here is paragraphs 16–28, 1,981 German words, the whole of the picnic scene on the hill: Züs Bünzlin's oration to the three journeymen, the ninefold-maiden game, the three self-advertisements, and the animal catalogue. It is stored as source-de-span.txt with the paragraph indices preserved, SHA-256 37b7ec97cf0c75ace49c7f5d1ef5edd2e7ea1bd5f20f4d73852f25b36b816c15. The tale is not stored whole.

One transcription fact that bears on the prose — see Erratum 1. PG 6696 appeared, on the reading this translation was made under, to carry only closing quotation marks. It does not: the opening „ survives as the byte that decodes to U+0084, thirty-three of them against thirty-three closing marks in this span. Speech boundaries below were reconstructed editorially from the reporting verbs and the sense (log D5); they were afterwards checked against the recovered opening marks and are correct, including the one D5 flagged as uncertain.

Contamination — measured before the span was chosen

contamination: suspected. Basis, measured and not asserted. A published English of this tale is freely reachable: Wolf von Schierbrand's Seldwyla Folks: Three Singular Tales (New York: Brentano's, 1919; PG ebook 34505), which contains "The Three Decent Combmakers" complete. Before the span was selected and before anything in it was translated, the lead rendered a 229-word gate span from outside it (paragraphs 36–37) from the German alone and tools/dependence_check.py compared that rendering with Schierbrand's:

The 13-token run is "night of it in many houses there was dancing and in the taverns". Against the project's own scale that is mid-range — S065 measured 10 tokens against Garnett and 11 against Fell; S079's record is 24 against an obscure 1923 anthology — and it is above the 12-gram threshold dependence_check.py calls the signal.

What follows for the design that uses this artifact. The lead is not an independent third translator of this work, so no claim in E-20260803c rests on lead-and-Schierbrand agreement being independent corroboration. Schierbrand enters as a descriptive human comparator only, and where he and the lead agree the agreement is discounted by this measurement. Where he fails to mark and the lead marks, the overlap runs against the finding, not for it. The gate span, both renderings and the tool output are at workshop/experiments/E-20260803c-occupied-slot/materials/gate/.

Regime

R04 — lead close translation, source-only. One pass with local revision, no published rendering of this work consulted before the freeze, no brief beyond the regime's own: stay close, let the English be English. No instruction to mark anything. The R01-style single pass was not used because the scene's registers are cumulative and a second reading of the whole span was needed to keep Züs's pulpit voice steady across 1,981 words.

Purpose

A general reading edition in English: a reader with no German, meeting Keller for the first time, reading for the comedy and the people in it. No facing text, no notes.

The translation — «The Three Decent Combmakers», paragraphs 16–28

[P16] Then Züs began to speak, tossing away a plum-stone and wiping her stained fingertips on the young grass: "Dear friends! See how beautiful and wide the world is, all about us full of glorious things and full of the dwellings of men! And yet I would wager that at this solemn hour there sit assembled together nowhere in all this wide world four souls so righteous-minded and so good in their kind as we are here — so ingenious and considerate of temper, so given over to all industrious exercises and virtues, to retirement, to thrift, to peaceableness and to heartfelt friendship. How many flowers stand about us here, of every kind the spring brings forth, and above all the yellow cowslips, which give a savoury and wholesome tea; but are they righteous, or industrious? thrifty, provident, and apt at clever and instructive thoughts? No, they are ignorant and spiritless creatures; soulless and void of reason they squander their time, and for all their beauty a dead hay is made of them, whereas we in our virtue are so far above them and yield to them in nothing, truly, in comeliness of form; for God has made us after His image and breathed His divine breath into us. Oh, that we might sit here for ever in this paradise and in such innocence! Yes, my friends, it seems to me as though we were all of us in the state of innocence, yet ennobled by a sinless knowledge; for we can all of us, thank God, read and write, and have all learned a skilled handicraft. For much I should have the aptitude and the gifts, and would undertake to perform things such as the most learned young lady cannot, if I were minded to go beyond my station; but modesty and humility are the foremost virtue of an upright female, and it is enough for me to know that my mind is not worthless and despised before a higher discernment. Many have desired me already who were not worthy of me, and now of a sudden I see three worthy bachelors gathered about me, of whom each one would be equally worthy to possess me! Measure by that how my heart must languish in this wonderful abundance, and take each of you an example from me, and think to yourselves that each was blossomed round by three maidens of equal worth who desired him, and that for that very reason he could incline to none of them and get none at all! Picture it to yourselves quite vividly: that three Maiden Bünzlins were wooing each one of you, and sat about you so, dressed as I am and of the like appearance, so that I were here present as it were ninefold, and looked at you from every side and languished after you! Do you do this?"

[P17] The worthy journeymen left off chewing in astonishment and laboured, with simple faces, to solve the strange problem. The little Suabian was first to bring it off, and cried with a lickerish look: "Yes, most esteemed Maiden Züs! If you will graciously permit it, I see you not merely threefold but a hundredfold, hovering about me and looking at me with gracious little eyes and offering me a thousand little kisses!"

[P18] "Not so!" said Züs, rebuking him with displeasure, "not in so unseemly and exaggerated a fashion! What can you be thinking of, immodest Dietrich? Not a hundredfold, and not offering little kisses, did I permit it, but threefold only for each, and in a chaste and honourable manner, so that no liberty is taken with me!"

[P19] "Yes," cried Jobst at last, pointing about him with a gnawed pear-stalk, "threefold only, but in the greatest respectability, I see the dearest Maiden Bünzli walking about me and beckoning to me kindly, laying her hand upon her heart! I thank you much, thank you, thank you most humbly!" said he, smirking and bowing to three sides, as though he really saw the apparitions. "That is as it should be," said Züs, smiling; "if there is any difference at all among you, then you are the most gifted, dear Jobst — at any rate the most sensible!" Fridolin the Bavarian was still not done with his imagining, but when he heard Jobst praised so, he took fright and cried hastily: "I too see the dearest Maiden Bünzli walking threefold about me in the greatest respectability and beckoning to me voluptuously, laying her hand upon——"

[P20] "Fie, Bavarian!" screamed Züs, turning her face away, "not one word more! Where do you find the boldness to speak of me in such foul words and to imagine such filth to yourself! Fie, fie!" The poor Bavarian was thunderstruck and turned burning red without knowing why; for he had imagined nothing whatever, and had only said, roughly after the sound of it, what he had heard from Jobst, having seen how the latter was praised for his speech. Züs turned again to Dietrich and said: "Well, dear Dietrich, have you not yet brought it off in a somewhat more modest way?" "Yes, by your leave," he answered, glad to be spoken to again, "I behold you now but three times about me, looking at me kindly but decently and offering me three white hands, which I kiss!"

[P21] "Good, then!" said Züs; "and you, Fridolin? Have you not yet returned from your straying? Can your unruly blood not yet settle to a decent imagining?" "Your pardon!" said Fridolin meekly; "I think I now see three maidens who offer me dried pears and seem not ill-disposed towards me. Not one is fairer than another, and the choice among them seems to me a bitter herb."

[P22] "Well then," said Züs, "since in your imagination you are surrounded by nine such wholly equal persons, and in that lovely abundance suffer want in your hearts none the less, measure my own condition by it; and as you have seen in me that I know how to compose myself with a wise and modest heart, take an example from my fortitude and promise me, and one another, that you will bear with each other henceforth, and that, as I part from you lovingly, you will part just as lovingly from one another, however the fate that awaits you may decide! Lay all your hands together, then, in my hand, and promise it!"

[P23] "Yes, truly," cried Jobst, "I at least will do it; it shall not fail for me!" and the other two cried hastily: "Nor for me, nor for me!" and they all laid their hands together — each of them, however, resolving to run in any case as best he could. "It shall truly not fail for me!" Jobst repeated; "for I have been of a merciful and concordant nature from my youth up. Never yet have I had a quarrel, and I could never bear to see a little creature suffer; wherever I have been I have got on well and earned the best praise for my quiet conduct; for although I understand a good many things a little too, and am a sensible young man, no one has ever seen me meddle in anything that was no concern of mine, and I have always done my duty in a judicious way. I can work as much as I like and it does me no harm, since I am hale and hearty and in my best years! All my mistresses have said that I am a man in a thousand, a paragon, and that I am easy to get on with! Ah! I really believe myself that I could live as in heaven with you, most beloved Maiden Züs!"

[P24] "Ay!" said the Bavarian eagerly, "that I well believe; it would be no great art either, to live as in heaven with the maiden! I should trust myself to that too, for I was not dropped on my head! My trade I understand from the ground up, and I know how to keep things in order without losing a cross word. Nowhere have I got into brawls, although I have worked in the largest cities, and never have I struck a cat or killed a spider. I am temperate and abstinent and content with any fare, and I know how to take my pleasure in the smallest things and be satisfied with them. But I am hale and merry too and can stand a good deal; a good conscience is the best elixir of life. All animals love me and run after me, because they scent my good conscience, for they will not stay by an unrighteous man. A poodle once followed me three days when I was travelling out of the city of Ulm, and I had to give him at last into a peasant's keeping, since as a humble journeyman I could not feed such a beast; and when I travelled through the Bohemian Forest, the stags and roe stood still within twenty paces and were not afraid of me. It is wonderful how even the wild beasts know their way about among men and know which are of a good heart!"

[P25] "Yes, that must be true!" cried the Suabian; "do you not see how this finch has been flying about in front of me all this while and trying to come near me? And that squirrel on the fir keeps looking round after me, and here a little beetle goes on crawling up my leg and will not be driven off at all. It must surely be very comfortable with me, the dear good little creature!"

[P26] But now Züs grew jealous and said somewhat hotly: "With me all animals like to stay! I had a bird eight years, and it died away from me most unwillingly; our cat rubs after me wherever I go and stand, and the neighbour's pigeons crowd and squabble before my window when I strew them crumbs! Wonderful properties have the animals, each after its kind! The lion follows gladly after kings and after heroes, and the elephant attends the prince and the valiant warrior; the camel carries the merchant through the desert and keeps fresh water for him in its belly, and the dog accompanies his master through every danger and casts himself into the sea for him! The dolphin loves music and follows ships, and the eagle armies. The ape is a man-like being and does everything he sees men do, and the parrot understands our speech and chatters with us like an old man! Even the serpents let themselves be tamed and dance upon the tip of their tail; the crocodile weeps human tears and is honoured and spared by the citizens there; the ostrich lets itself be saddled and ridden like a steed; the wild buffalo draws the wagon of man and the horned reindeer his sledge. The unicorn furnishes him the snow-white ivory and the tortoise her transparent bones——"

[P27] "By your leave," said all three combmakers at once, "here you are certainly mistaken: ivory is got from elephants' teeth, and tortoiseshell combs are made from the shell and not from the bones of the tortoise!"

[P28] Züs turned fiery red and said: "That is still the question, for you have certainly not seen where it is got from, but only work up the pieces; I am seldom mistaken otherwise, but be that as it may, let me finish speaking: not only the animals have their remarkable peculiarities implanted by God, but even the dead stone that is dug out of the mountains. The crystal is transparent as glass, but the marble hard and veined, now white and now black; amber has electric properties and draws the lightning; but then it burns and smells like incense. The magnet draws iron; on the slate one can write, but not on the diamond, for that is hard as steel; and the glazier uses it for cutting glass, because it is small and pointed. You see, dear friends, that I know a little to say about the animals too! But as concerns my relation to them, this is to be remarked: the cat is a sly and cunning beast and is therefore attached only to sly and cunning people; the dove, however, is an emblem of innocence and simplicity and can feel itself drawn only to simple, guiltless souls. Now since cats and doves are attached to me, it follows from this that I am at once clever and simple, sly and innocent, even as it is said: Be ye wise as serpents and simple as doves! In this way we may indeed value the animals and their relation to us, and learn many a thing from it, if we know how to consider the matter aright."

English: 2,208 words to the German's 1,981 — factor 1.115. Thirteen source paragraphs to thirteen English.

Translator's log

Frozen 2026-08-03 before the Class A census of E-20260803c was written, before any rendering under R1's brief existed, and before Schierbrand 1919 was opened on this span. Decisions and alternatives, not quality claims. Numbered D1–D19 for this work.

D1 — Züs's register is the whole problem, and it is a mixture. Keller has her speak a homiletic German: archaic imperative plurals (Sehet, Bemesset, nehmet, denket, ermesset, gelobet, leget, lasset, Ihr sehet) that belong to the Luther Bible, laid over a shopkeeper's vocabulary and a schoolgirl's natural history. I chose to carry the seam rather than either side of it: "Measure by that how my heart must languish", "take an example from my fortitude", "Be ye wise as serpents" — biblical cadence — set against "savoury and wholesome tea" and "the neighbour's pigeons crowd and squabble". The alternative live throughout was a uniform modern English with the comedy carried by content alone; it was rejected because in German the form is half the joke.

D2 — rechtfertige (P16) is not a word. Keller writes vier so rechtfertige und gutartige Seelen where the language wants rechtschaffene or gerechte. It is Züs reaching for a bigger word than she owns. Options: (a) normalise to "righteous"; (b) coin an English malapropism; (c) use a real but slightly wrong word. I took (c): "four souls so righteous-minded and so good in their kind" — "righteous-minded" is available English and is the wrong compound here, which is the effect wanted. (b) was drafted as "justifiable souls" and dropped: it reads as a translator's error rather than a character's.

D3 — the tale's title word gerecht runs through the span and cannot be held to one English word. gerecht is Keller's key term and covers just, righteous, upright, punctual in one's dealings, with the tale's whole irony in the gap. In this span it appears at rechtfertige (D2), sind sie gerecht oder arbeitsam (of the flowers), and bei einem ungerechten Menschen (of the animals). I used "righteous" for the flowers and "an unrighteous man" for the Bavarian's animals, keeping one root visible, and let rechtfertige diverge under D2. Consistency was preferred over local fit at both points where the two competed.

D4 — Jungfer / Jungfrau / Jungfer Bünzli (P17, P19, P23). Three grades: werteste Jungfer Züs (Dietrich, ceremonious), die liebste Jungfer Bünzli (Jobst, and the surname is clipped from Bünzlin, which is fawning familiarity), die liebste Jungfrau Bünzli (Fridolin, parroting Jobst and getting the noun wrong upward). "Miss" is anachronistic for the register and "virgin" is unusable. I took "Maiden" capitalised as a title throughout — "most esteemed Maiden Züs", "the dearest Maiden Bünzli" — which keeps the archaism and lets the clipped surname stand untranslated so the fawning survives. Fridolin's Jungfrau for Jungfer is not marked in English: both go to "Maiden" and the escalation is lost. Alternative considered and dropped: "Mistress" for Jungfrau, which would have marked it but is wrong about marital status, which is the joke's own subject.

D5 — the missing opening quotation marks. PG 6696 prints only closing ". Every speech boundary here is my reconstruction. One is genuinely uncertain: at P19, So ist's recht," sagte Züs lächelnd, "wenn irgendein Unterschied… — Züs's line could begin at So ist's recht (taken) or the narration could run on. I took the reading that gives Züs the compliment to Jobst, because P19's following sentence has Fridolin react to hearing Jobst praised.

D6 — Stellt euch doch recht lebhaft vor … Tut ihr dies? (P16). The German ends her fantasy with a schoolmistress's comprehension check. "Do you do this?" is odd English and was kept odd; "Are you doing it?" and "Well? Have you done it?" were both live and both smoothed away the flat imperative tone she is using on grown men.

D7 — verneunfacht (P16). "Ninefolded" does not exist. "as it were ninefold" keeps the arithmetic — three men × three maidens — which the sentence needs, and loses the coined verb.

D8 — lüsternem Gesicht (P17). Lecherous is too strong for a man about to ask for kisses in company; greedy loses the sexual edge. "a lickerish look" was chosen for the period colour and because English "lickerish" holds both the appetite and the lust, which is exactly the doubled sense Keller's lüstern has after a paragraph of dried pears and plums.

D9 — the diminutives Äuglein, Küßlein (P17), Tierlein (P23), Tierchen (P25), Schwäblein (P17). German makes these with a suffix; English has to spend a word. I spent it four times — "gracious little eyes", "a thousand little kisses", "a little creature", "the dear good little creature" — and once could not: Das Schwäblein became "The little Suabian", where English "little" reads as body size and the German is the narrator being condescending about a grown man. Noted as a loss, not repaired.

D10 — Sie and ihr (throughout). Züs addresses the three men singly with Sie and collectively with ihr; the three address her with Sie; Dietrich addresses his fellows with ihr (P25). English has one pronoun and every one of these is "you". Nothing was done about it: under R04 there is no brief to compensate, and no compensation suggested itself that was not an addition. This is the largest single loss in the span and it is systematic rather than local — it runs to twenty-odd sites. (An evaluative reading of the size of that loss would be internal-judgment-only and none is offered here.)

D11 — one place where the pronoun is not just Sie (P19). Züs, praising Jobst, writes so seid **Ihr** doch der Begabteste, lieber Jobst: not Sie, which she uses to him elsewhere, but the older polite-plural Ihr addressed to one man. It is a third rung, and it is a move — she elevates him for one clause. In English "you are the most gifted" is what "Sie sind der Begabteste" would also be. Recorded and not repaired. The one device that came to mind, an inversion ("gifted you are, dear Jobst"), was rejected as burlesque.

D12 — sei (P23), Konjunktiv I. Alle meine Meisterinnen haben noch gesagt, ich sei ein Tausendsmensch … und mit mir sei gut auskommen — the subjunctive tells a German reader that Jobst is reporting and that the narrator is not endorsing. English "have said that I am a man in a thousand" endorses by default. Options: "would have it that I am", "were pleased to say that I am", "used to say I was". All three mark it; all three add a colouring the German does not have in the words themselves. I used the plain "have said that I am" and record the loss, because under R04 the subjunctive is a fact about German grammar and the alternatives are all a fact about the translator.

D13 — Tausendsmensch, Ausbund (P23). Two compliments from a mistress to a hired man. "a man in a thousand, a paragon" — the first is a set English phrase of the right register and period, the second is bookish where Ausbund is bookish. Considered: "a jewel", which is warmer than Ausbund and belongs to the wrong class of speaker.

D14 — ich bin nicht auf den Kopf gefallen (P24). The German idiom means "I am no fool". A translator can idiomise ("I wasn't born yesterday") or keep the picture. I kept the picture — "I was not dropped on my head" — because Fridolin is a man who repeats phrases he has heard without understanding them (P19), and a slightly-off literal fits the character. The idiom is not opaque in English.

D15 — the animal catalogue (P26). Züs recites a bestiary in a rhythm of paired clauses. The temptation was to vary the connectives in English for readability; I kept the German's monotonous und … und … und, and kept the inversion "Wonderful properties have the animals" at the head of it, because the sentence is a recitation and should sound like one. The one thing not preserved is ziehet/liefert's archaic -et, which has no English counterpart at all.

D16 — das Krokodil weint menschliche Tränen und wird von den Bürgern dort geachtet (P26). dort has no antecedent: Züs has lost her place in the schoolbook. "is honoured and spared by the citizens there" keeps the dangling "there". Smoothing it to "in those countries" would have repaired her mistake for her.

D17 — Mit Verlaub (P27). The three interrupt her with a formula of deference before contradicting her. "By your leave" — same shape, same period, same function.

D18 — so lasset mich ausreden (P28). Züs, caught out on ivory, does not concede. The archaic imperative lasset is the same pulpit form as D1's and is doing something else here: it is a woman losing an argument and reaching for authority. "let me finish speaking" carries the content; the archaism is carried instead by "be that as it may" in the same sentence, which is where I moved it.

D19 — Seid klug wie die Schlangen und einfältig wie die Tauben (P28). Matthew 10:16, quoted by Züs as though it were her own conclusion. English has a fixed form for it. "Be ye wise as serpents and simple as doves" — the Authorised Version's "harmless as doves" was rejected: Züs needs einfältig to mean simple because she has just applied it to herself.

What this log does not contain

No claim that any of the above is good. No comparison with any other English. The span's second-person losses (D10, D11) and its subjunctive loss (D12) are recorded here before anything was designed around them, which is the point of the freeze.

Errata

Erratum 1 (2026-08-03, same session, found by the experiment's verifier). The Source section and log D5 asserted that PG 6696 had lost every opening quotation mark. That is false. The opening „ is present throughout as U+0084 — a byte the first reading passed over as noise — thirty-three of them, matching the thirty-three closing marks. The claim is corrected above. No prose changes: the boundaries reconstructed under the false belief were checked against the recovered marks and every one is right, including P19's So ist's recht, which D5 named as the one genuinely uncertain case. The error was in a statement about the source text, not in the translation of it, and it was caught by a substring assertion in analysis/verify.py, not by rereading.

Lineage and evaluation

• Regime R04; version 1; no prior version of this work in this project.
• Evaluated by: workshop/experiments/E-20260803c-occupied-slot — site-level recovery grading by three non-Anthropic seats, blind to provenance. The lead does not judge this translation (charter §5).
• Cost: $0. Lead translation is free and is never ledgered (charter §3, A4).